Escape From Bleak (life after NaNoWriMo)

So As Promised I have decided to revisit one of my NaNoWriMo drafts for re-writing, editing, and maybe beyond.

I chose my most recent one because some of the things left out of this draft are still lingering in my brain, and because I really like the beginning and want the rest of it to at least match it.

This is entering into unknown waters for me, which is a good thing, so I thought what the heck, let’s all go along for the ride and see what happens?

Here is the first draft more or less how it looked at the end of November, but reformatted to be readable… and have chapters… Be warned it’s raw and hurried first draft stuff… not for the faint of heart.

EscapeFromBleak_nanodraft_formatted

As I wander blindly down this dark alley I’ll post about the process and toss up more drafts in case anyone is interested.

So now step 1: I will read the damn thing. Wish me luck.

3 comments

  1. UrDad says:

    Well, I’ve arrived at chapter 12 of Escape from Bleak, and I’ve a felling more disclosures of what is going on in the story are about to unfold. I’m intrigued by the characters and quite engrossed in trying to figure out just what they are. I like they way you introduce them with no explanation of what they are; they’re just there participating in the action. Jason, Arthur, and the Tin Man are humans, but Gianna seems to be either a human or humanoid with mechanical appendages and limited mobility. Maybe she suffered significant damage at one point and was put back together with spare parts. Bob is an outsized robot that can function somewhat independently or with a pilot. “He” does a lot of stuff. I am somewhat intrigued by the “Beast.” He is certainly human, but he is also capable of great violence and destruction, but by what means? I’m not certain why he is a prisoner of Jason and Arthur (et al), but they must have some future plans for him. I am most interested in “The Player.” He comes off like a God with dementia. What a cool and humorous idea!

    Please comment on my observations so far. Am I reading you correctly, or ridiculously out there somewhere? Btw, I understand that you write these pieces under very difficult time restrictions, and what is presented here is a very rough draft. This work, like some other stuff you’ve written, deserves an edited version. It’s very good.

    • willrobot says:

      Thank you for the feedback so far!

      I am a big fan of not over explaining characters and letting them unfold so I hope that is working.

      Gianna is human as well though missing her limbs and a bit augmented with cybernetics allowing her to integrate with the prosthetics Arthur cobbled together for her as well as connect to the ship (or other compatible devices). I am not sure if we will ever now all of her story.

      The Beast was meant for bigger things than he gets to do at the moment, but he will have his moment in the sun so to speak.

      And that was what I was going for with The Player so I am happy it comes through. He suffers a little from time constraints which will be addressed in draft 2 along with The Beast and some others you haven’t met yet.

  2. UrDad says:

    Btw, I would welcome reactions to my comments from other readers. I know there are others out there that are supportive of Will and his endeavors. What say you?

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